This is wonderfully eerie and surprisingly moving. Doris feels fully alive on the page, and her loneliness makes the strange fruit and missing cats storyline hit much harder. The image of the cats inside the fruit is genuinely unsettling, and the story balances horror, sadness, and dark humor. I especially loved Doris’s desire to be seen and appreciated, which gives the ending a dope weight beyond the creepiness. The final line is fantastic and leaves the story on exactly the right note.
Dayum. We we went opposites ways in the emotions but we still chose horror as our baseline. I love it. You got me all teary and feeling Doris weary. Great job!
I thought there were all sorts of strange similarities, despite the totally different vibes. Yours actually cracked me up, like full outloud guffawing. It’s great.
I would love to hear Doris play piano and I'd love a slice of that cake. The juxtaposition of violent language (ripped open, faceless) mixed with this innocent woman is truly wonderful
This is wonderfully eerie and surprisingly moving. Doris feels fully alive on the page, and her loneliness makes the strange fruit and missing cats storyline hit much harder. The image of the cats inside the fruit is genuinely unsettling, and the story balances horror, sadness, and dark humor. I especially loved Doris’s desire to be seen and appreciated, which gives the ending a dope weight beyond the creepiness. The final line is fantastic and leaves the story on exactly the right note.
Oh I wasnt prepared for this much emotion this early in the morning! You really get me in the feels, dude.
Dayum. We we went opposites ways in the emotions but we still chose horror as our baseline. I love it. You got me all teary and feeling Doris weary. Great job!
I thought there were all sorts of strange similarities, despite the totally different vibes. Yours actually cracked me up, like full outloud guffawing. It’s great.
I think I know Doris!! Love this
Does Doris live in your heart, Elizabeth?
She does
Jesus fucking Christ Sando.
Damn. I need more Doris energy to build an audience.
Thoroughly enjoyed.
I'm mad I could not make it to this one. Damn, Sando, this is good. Too many good lines to choose from.
I would love to hear Doris play piano and I'd love a slice of that cake. The juxtaposition of violent language (ripped open, faceless) mixed with this innocent woman is truly wonderful
Careful with the cake, though.
Marcy should've been nicer
Marcy, look at the trouble you caused. This was gruesome and tender, all blended. Great work.
this is mercurial, weird and demands several reads... swirling surreal and yet mundane setting. love it!