mmmm what a rich resonant character this is. what is her story...how we want to know. really intriguing slice of lives here. all sorts of wrongness and badness and 100 hints along the way. really enjoyed this!
There are so many layers to this story and to Willa, I’ve read it three times! It’s like an old house with all the different layers of wallpaper peeling away.
She’s quite unpleasant. Like old cabbage. And the liquid carrot you left in the bottom of the veg basket.
I really appreciate how much this story feels alive, how we get to experience the details of her day as they happen and how we only get to know the protagonist as she interacts with her neighbors.
So many great moments! I especially loved these lines: "Grief is just love with nowhere to go," "Crest. Fallen. Like a bird that can’t fly, falling flat on its face." "Faith it til you make it," "I imagine the water, the grit from my body, the dried tears all filtering into the pipes. Bits of me, streaming into the other apartments, like parts of me were in their rooms. Tiny molecules of me sliding through the radiators, the drains, like roots of trees underground."
Willa should write a memoir. Maybe this is part of it.
I am sure Willa has a lot to say. How she'd get this way? Right?
Definitely can see her writing more autofiction
mmmm what a rich resonant character this is. what is her story...how we want to know. really intriguing slice of lives here. all sorts of wrongness and badness and 100 hints along the way. really enjoyed this!
Thanks, Nick! She may re-emerge in the future. She has a back story.
There are so many layers to this story and to Willa, I’ve read it three times! It’s like an old house with all the different layers of wallpaper peeling away.
She’s quite unpleasant. Like old cabbage. And the liquid carrot you left in the bottom of the veg basket.
But she is also mushy and sweet like the melted chocolate in a baked cookie! I love her, Zivah! She breaks my crispy little heart!
Awww, bless her sickly sweet heart!
I think she’s one of those characters o love to feel a little repulsed by. If I don’t dream about her tonight, I’ll be very surprised!
Tell me everything tomorrow morning.
Great character work
Thank you, Andrew! I really felt her.
Willa is just terrible but in a way that I can't help but love. You've really done some tricky stuff here. Incredible story. My fave of yours so far.
Wow... big comment there. I love her too. When she's willing to give the cookies to the young boy, it just kills me.
I'll have to finish the rest, I only took a nibble out of the chocolate chip cookie. But killer intro! I got excited when the CD played came out 💿
You better finish up the cookies, they are almost gone!
Oh wow yeah thanks for the reminder! This makes me both miss and also not want to go back to my previous life in an apartment building. Very nice. 🍪
That is a hilarious comment! 100 % Josh!
I really appreciate how much this story feels alive, how we get to experience the details of her day as they happen and how we only get to know the protagonist as she interacts with her neighbors.
So many great moments! I especially loved these lines: "Grief is just love with nowhere to go," "Crest. Fallen. Like a bird that can’t fly, falling flat on its face." "Faith it til you make it," "I imagine the water, the grit from my body, the dried tears all filtering into the pipes. Bits of me, streaming into the other apartments, like parts of me were in their rooms. Tiny molecules of me sliding through the radiators, the drains, like roots of trees underground."