What a beautiful story! I loved the structure and how it left such room for all that spectacular imagery. I really enjoyed it, so thanks for your mistake!!!
I enjoy the kenning poetic form where words are run together like this. So, to me this has a dark poetic feel that makes me want to find out more. I think you used just the right amount of these word combinations. And the short, snipped sentences.
Oh 100%. It can really exhaust me with long novels. I’m not sold on Solenoid, for instance (new book; very respected; I have to persevere) - but Beckett did it best). I still think Beckett is the model for clipped prose fiction in general. It can work in poetry, but my sentences tend to be more baroque in prose, especially Fiction.
I actually attempted this one in verse during some of the revisions, which could have made the weirdness more… expected. But it’s not a poem.
I fully agree, a whole novel could get fatiguing, unless it gets you in a kind of trance. Could also change your brain frame, like Absolom (x2) where you have to change your whole mind to get to a place where it become legible.
Your words paint pictures in my mind and transport me but that’s just me. Deep thoughts, yes, but that’s just as much a part of you as lighter thoughts are. You bestow your gifts to “us” trustingly and with vulnerability giving “us” an opportunity to share and explore your thoughts, feelings, and emotions… thank you!
Jan could attest to how strange it is that I write such dark, lonely pieces… I am an incredibly cheerful person! She is writing up a storm, finishing that novel of hers!
Oh, WELL DONE! My sincere congratulations! Wish I could buy you and your daughter champagne to celebrate! We could all raise a glass in our separate homes at a designated time, lol.
From another person stuck in a dark place today, sending you prayers for strength and courage to meet the challenges to bring light to your darkness. From Leonard Cohen’s Anthem:
‘Flash flood’ by Kathy Hoyle. It was published a year ago, and I still think about it. This is a great post Kathy, thank you 🙏
Hey, did you post this in the wrong place? What were you talking about…. now I am curious!
I totally did! 😳So sorry 🫣😂. I am a tech liability lol. I was replying to Kathy Fish on The Art of Flash Fiction. This is the piece I referred to: https://flashfloodjournal.blogspot.com/2024/06/sea-fret-by-kathy-hoyle.html xx
No worries, Teresa! It was a very easy error. Now I am going to go read that piece!
It’s hard hitting … just a heads up…
What a beautiful story! I loved the structure and how it left such room for all that spectacular imagery. I really enjoyed it, so thanks for your mistake!!!
Ha ha! Plenty more mistakes where that came from. Happy to have been of service 😁
I enjoy the kenning poetic form where words are run together like this. So, to me this has a dark poetic feel that makes me want to find out more. I think you used just the right amount of these word combinations. And the short, snipped sentences.
*To HEAR (excuse my mistake).
Thank God Samuel Beckett wrote so we can write in punctuation like this. Same with Joyce's combining of words. Gorgeous to read aloud.
It is fully addictive to play around like this... but dicey, can't overdo it, right?
Oh 100%. It can really exhaust me with long novels. I’m not sold on Solenoid, for instance (new book; very respected; I have to persevere) - but Beckett did it best). I still think Beckett is the model for clipped prose fiction in general. It can work in poetry, but my sentences tend to be more baroque in prose, especially Fiction.
I actually attempted this one in verse during some of the revisions, which could have made the weirdness more… expected. But it’s not a poem.
I fully agree, a whole novel could get fatiguing, unless it gets you in a kind of trance. Could also change your brain frame, like Absolom (x2) where you have to change your whole mind to get to a place where it become legible.
I look forward to reading more of your work :)
Can’t be a better compliment than that!
No there isn't. And just this: "Playful, melancholy, raucous, dark" . . .
Match made in heaven.
this is so good!
Your words paint pictures in my mind and transport me but that’s just me. Deep thoughts, yes, but that’s just as much a part of you as lighter thoughts are. You bestow your gifts to “us” trustingly and with vulnerability giving “us” an opportunity to share and explore your thoughts, feelings, and emotions… thank you!
You okay, hun?
That just cracked me up! I am great, Sheri... just experimenting! I am starting to wonder if this piece is utterly incoherent!
No, no. Perfectly coherent, I just mistook it for a cri de coeur, lol! I'm far too literal, for a literary sort of person.
Hey, where's Janet? I haven't seen her post anything. Is she okay, too?
Jan could attest to how strange it is that I write such dark, lonely pieces… I am an incredibly cheerful person! She is writing up a storm, finishing that novel of hers!
Truth. On all counts. Published today, tho
Oh, WELL DONE! My sincere congratulations! Wish I could buy you and your daughter champagne to celebrate! We could all raise a glass in our separate homes at a designated time, lol.
Haha. No. I meant on substack. 😎But thank you all the same for your kindness and enthusiasm.
That's beautiful.
Thank you, Nancy.
From another person stuck in a dark place today, sending you prayers for strength and courage to meet the challenges to bring light to your darkness. From Leonard Cohen’s Anthem:
Ring the bells that still can ring
Forget your perfect offering
There is a crack, a crack in everything
That's how the light gets in
Ring the bells that still can ring
Forget your perfect offering
There is a crack, a crack in everything
That's how the light gets in
That's how the light gets in
That's how the light gets in
What a beautiful message! Thank you, Sandra.
Whhaaattt?
My complete pleasure.
I’m saying my brain cannot expand as far as your brain, however I admire your brain very much.
This one is perty dense, I'll give you that. My brains thanks your brain for the compliment though!
What are you saying here, Kathy? Have I toppled over the edge of the "Experimental Precipice?"